*An overall improvement is the grand total amount of time it took to finish. My previous essay took over two weeks to write, however this one only took three days instead.
*Less redundancy in hook, I am a little more straightforward this time and did not say "So and so has once brought up the statement...." *More formal and academic way of speaking, there is no "don'ts", "it's", "can'ts" and other conjugations *Personal pronouns has been kept to a minimum *Thesis has improved significantly and provides points that are actually accurate to the upcoming points within the essay |